So, Here's my poem!

[FearlessWoman]

So, this is for the first time ever I am writing a self-written poem here! Believe me, @US-poet inspired me to share one! She is an amazing poet and since I can't write as beautiful as hers, here's the best I came up with!
If you know me, you know that I am obsessed with Pegasus :)
This poem is dedicated to my Pegasus (when I Will have one in future because THEY ARE LOVE)
I'm really nervous since I had never shared my poems to anyone except my parents!
sighs
Alright, I talk too much...
so here it goes

I should have been known
the moment you flew away
I would have been known
when you blew it with a neigh

I love you more than as a pet
since I grabbed you as we met
Now, I see you as my jet
but wait, we haven't finished yet

I first saw you in the light
the light was too bright
I love holding you tight
my sweet little pegasus white

If my dad had ever found you
He would rebuke the princess
But he wouldn't mind you
If you proved him in less

I will never force you
To do things for me
I will never get a source
to tie on the strings for me

No one knows that
you have a dragon inside
every day your voice grows
you are a wagon inside

You have soft and sensitive features
would never think of you using as a leather
everyone saw you as a hater
I don't care, we promised to stay together

When we hear an attack in the castle
getting cracks on the passel
this time, with a nice bite of trouble
together well fight with a blow of our bubble

I peeked on you behind that tree
and you were shining in the daylight
I freaked when you were behind me
we were surrounded by the black night

I couldn't imagine myself on a flight
Sitting on your back getting myself excite
hoping that I will be alright
keeping my lungs airtight

We flew higher and higher
I was in a gleam
and then I saw a ball of fire
of course, I was in a dream

I know, it's a pretty long poem and the fact that there are so many grammatical mistakes!
I guess in a poem, in order to make things rhyme, sometimes you gotta ignore these mistakes... so...

Please tell me how it is and how you feel about it! Especially you @US-poet

[Baggu]

@dangerouswoman Appreciation For A Good Content is Necessary
I Really Enjoy This Thing
In Such A Place
This Shows Your Dedication!
Going Good Ya!
Enjoy Spread Love!
Pegasus ❤

[sup]

@Dangerous-Woman Well written :)

[Baggu]

@DangerousWoman I Have Seen Many People In Here
Talking On Shitty Can't Say Shitty But Ya Random Discussion
But This Was Something New Thing In D House! 🤗
Talking About The Main Content i.e Poem
That Was Incredible! 👍👌
Beautiful Kinda Touching Lines!
Damn Cool
Going Good Ya!

[FearlessWoman]

@bugsbunny Really?! I thank you soooooo much!! I just can't express how happy I am to know that!!!

[FearlessWoman]

@bugsbunny YOU ARE SO SWEET :D
THANK YOUUUU

[anup123]

This is written beautifully. especially part where u described about fighting together. that part bought a smile. Keep it up.Its not at all a lengthy poem, I felt like u woke up a bit early or we could have seen some more interesting events. Keep on posting !

[Quatre]

@dangerouswoman That’s really, really good!!!!!!!! You should write more poems!

[FearlessWoman]

@kat_15 Thank you sooo much

[FearlessWoman]

@anup123 Aww! You really made my day by saying that... :)

[nik.sub.blz]

@Dangerous-Woman awesome!!
Keep writing and posting 👍🏻
great work 🤗

[FearlessWoman]

@nik-sub-blz Thank you sooo much :D

[FearlessWoman]

@sup Aw! Thank you soooooo much :D

[US poet]

@dangerouswoman I like the sing song nature of it, and it was a great ride that I'd take again. The only thing I would edit out it the parenthesis, as it takes you out of the poem and is not needed. If you need an explanation like that make it apart of the poem, but it's unnecessary. Keep up the good work and keep on sharing.

[FearlessWoman]

@us-poet OH!! I get it. I should work on that!
Besides thank you so much for that :D

[US poet]

@dangerouswoman good edit and great job. It's very charming. I like your style.

[BugsBunny]

@DangerousWoman Bugs Bunny here!
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