• @Cosmic_Lady I’m the me that I always am. I try and stay true to myself. Some days I’m a better me than yesterday. And some days I’m a worse me. And some days I’m the me that is barley existing.


  • @Wicked_

    Wow
    "Speachless


  • I've read this and it is beautiful.
    I like the feel maybe cause it relates
    a bit more than it should. Bravo keep them coming lovely write.


  • Fresh face, short limbs, and unhushed voice,
    a being largely free of cellular decay,
    its pureed foods and brightly-colored toys,
    it's someone else’s hope, a pitiful display
    of a denial of a path that’s set -
    new, young, old, sick, and dead.
    I do not envy it the prison of its bliss,
    it’ll be a while till it gets a say in this,
    distressful moment of a notice of a fall,
    disgraceful thrashing, anger, all,
    a wish for cosmic speed and orbiting the Earth,
    potentially subjecting someone else to birth,
    and then a vision, that
    wherever it was sent,
    it's not a fall,
    it's a controlled descent.


  • @linear I love it. Gives a slight sense of hope yet helplessness to control ones fate. I think I’ve met someone better than I at writing. hugs you Thanks for the reply


  • @Wicked_ u know what I humbley request you to write about a giggle , laugh ,funny .. or the day you laughed hard forgetting whole Surroundings ..
    A thought came across that now white writing, as far I know what ever this new age poet had all recycled inexperienced pain which do not have weight of feeling or pain !! Also I know no one wrote a poem of sad because of being happy .. so ever thought about it to try something which never tried by some past as we know ??


  • @knownsense i used to write lots of poetry. 99% of it came from pain. Are you familiar with the term catharsis? Sad poems ARE happy because they give the writer momentary relief from the dark thoughts which hound them. Vast amounts of art comes from the darkness which consumes us. I mean for instance would you ask, say, Mazzy Star to sing an upbeat disco song? You're missing the point here imo


  • @Scottish I do agree my friend it comes from pain but it's do not have weight with this new age long poem like a story .. and I did mention earlier it recycled also inexperienced borrowed have a just a glance of pain not really experienced one.. That's what the point was about new age too cool poets !! Before poet used to write for themselves and the experience they gain all in four or 6 lines.. now it's s story to elebrate 6 line not skilled or experienced


  • @knownsense poetry has always come in all shapes and forms. I agree, it's a subjective experience, personal to the individual, you either relate or you don't, that's the beauty of it for me. One line of poetry can really sort your head out. Claire has written a bunch of stuff that speaks to me. But the poet who fixed my head lots as a teenager was Louis Macniece. That guy was profound and insightful. And if he was around today I'm convinced he'd be a rapper, his words just flow!


  • @Scottish indeed it comes in all form and shape, I have no disrespect and I appreciate,also I know , as you said need to have connection towards it to understand and appreciate it, louis macancie may be I didn't connect with him or nothing interesting he have written, according to me something I can appreciate.. I am sure I came across but not like Persian poets which is more darker pain realistic logic innit, please check if know them it's good or else it's never too late to know like Hafiz!! Kalil gibran..
    And we live now and it is stupid to compare poet from 200 years ago.. but feel pethaticaly sad we cant even match that old school brain .. still those poem are valid in future also will be appreciated each and every line i guess !! So that's the difference they made in Thier time and far far futurestic..
    Also point is proved from my side hope you understand what exactly the point was ??


  • @linear Among the dark shadows,
    Within these castle walls,
    I have been waiting for a long time,
    Feels like an eternity,
    But I will stay here forever,
    Day and night,
    Till the day it comes,
    To steal me away,
    With its cold blue wind,
    Breathing on this wounded heart,
    All my strength and will be pulled by this wind,
    Far away over the seas, over the land,
    To wherever it wants,
    To wherever it desires,
    Away from this world.


  • @Chaibale it's good you hear it, my prince,
    a roaring ocean force, about to hit,
    forty-one million square miles of it.
    white poem seems a lazy choise somewhat,
    your words straighforwatd and default,
    and if I were to share
    what I think of this
    my mouth would
    most surely need a rinse.


  • @linear

    I remember, vividly so,
    When my mind fell apart at the seams,
    But I still could see,
    There was something picturesque about that place,
    Even in an open space,
    Your emotions had an reverberation,
    And there you are,
    Out there without care,
    Having the time of your life,
    But all I ask of you
    Think twice, you only live once,
    That's my only advice,
    Who do you think you are?
    Do you really think you are in control?
    You and I are not so different,
    When I was little,
    My heroes were mere mortals who had the heart to lose their lives out on a limb,
    Ever since then, it looked like fun,
    I was willing to die when I'm done
    Even if it wasn't my time,
    Maybe I'm just delirious,
    Maybe you're delirious,
    Maybe we're delirious,
    Or it's probably just me..


  • @linear hey, can i dm you?


  • 2 kilometers