@sxydemonchic9 the worst or simpliest problems won't be solved if you can't seperate your mind from your feelings . Always remind yourself that the origin of any depression or sadness is feelings . Try to focus on a goal in your life that's my advice for you .Good luck
You're a benefit to humanity
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You are not a threat to the society
Just give a break to u and your anxiety
There are the reasons of variety
But not about you and your personalityTrust me you do matter
Look, a bird for you that chatter
They would make you flatter
You just made happy marbles scatterTo the world you are important
Look, those stars twinkling at constant
Just don't be a dark absorbent
Don't let your happiness be shortenedDon't let your soul be depressed
thank god you are the one blessed
some do not even get it expressed
but they are the ones more oppressedThey are the ones seeking for hope
In some situations, they cannot cope
They don't see happiness even by a microscope
Have to climb to the top from a steep slopeBut they do know how to handle the pain
And you must get it inside your brain
Ending it all will owe you no gain
In fact, you'll lose the beauty of the rainMany of you get your ego hurt
That is such a shame and dirt
How ending it all is gonna give you comfort
"I'm stupid" should be written on your shirtTrust me, it will get better with time
Sit back and taste this juice of the lime
You will need some energy to climb
Turn those happy memories on rewindYou are blessed, you are alive
C'mon and give me a high five
Put on the seat belt and I'll drive
We need to tell others they need to surviveI always knew in some part
Something was there in your heart
That wanted you alive from the start
Now, you and happiness can never be apart!DW
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Suicide is an option
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@hermes Explain yourself
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@dangerouswoman It's that persons choice to kill him/herself or not. People choose that option because they don't want to tell others what is going on around their lives, even though it would be the best option to.
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@hermes said in Suicide is not an option:
Suicide is an option
It DEFINITely(definite+ly) is, just look at the DEFINITion
Option:
"a thing that is or may be chosen."
Can people choose suicide? They sure can. Should they chose suicide? It depends but 99% of the time HELL NO
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@ᑕᖇiᗰᔕ-ᑎ And that is the perfect reason why I am telling them to not choose that option and see around them and they will realize that there are people who are facing similar pressure (maybe even worse) towards themselves but they do not think suicide is an option to solve their problems.
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@thestrangest Okay, some logical explanation coming over here. :upside-down_face:
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you might want to use something like this before posting your poems:
http://www.reverso.net/spell-checker/english-spelling-grammar/Example:
1st try to paste the whole text as it is
You'll get an aerror because it's too long so see how many paragraphs you can fit at a time
I found out that it was 3 paragraphs
2nd paste in what you wrote in parts and see what spelling/ grammar/ form of a verb isn't accepted then search what the correct writting is if you don't think the program got it right
1st part
Result:
You are not a threat to the societyJust give a break to you and your anxietyThere are the reasons of variety But not about you and your personalityTrust me, you do matterLook, a bird for you that chatterThey would make you fatterYou just made happy marbles scatterTo the world you are importantLook, those stars twinkling at constantJust don't be a dark absorbentDon't let your happiness be shortened
Found errors
U>You
Trust me you do matter>trust me, you do matter
Flatter>fatter>(there was an error detected but the suggested solution was incorrect too)>(find the correct form of the verb by looking for it on google or whatever)>flattered2nd part
Result:
Don't let your soul be depressed thank god you are the one blessed some do not even get it expressed but they are the ones more oppressed They are the ones seeking for hopeIn some situations, they cannot copeThey don't see happiness even with a microscope Have to climb to the top of a steep slopeBut they do know how to handle the painAnd you must get it inside your brainEnding it all will owe you no gainIn fact, you'll lose the beauty of the rain
Found errors
By>with
From>of3rd part
Result:
Many of you get your ego hurtThat is such a shame and dirtHow ending it all is gonna give you comfort "I'm stupid" should be written on your shirtTrust me, it will get better with timeSit back and taste this juice of the limeYou will need some energy to climbTurn those happy memories on rewindYou are blessed, you are aliveC'mon and give me a high fivePut on the seat belt and I'll driveWe need to tell others they need to survive
Found errors:
Gonna>(there is an error detected but there are multiple suggested solutions in which only 1 is correct)>(choose the right one)>going to
Note
If this was supposed to be a rhetorical question then it should be
"How is ending it all going to give you comfort?"
4th part
EVERYTHING IS CORRECT
Everything put together + highlighted edits from me:
You are not a threat to
thesociety
Just give a break to you and your anxiety
There are the reasons to variety
But not about you and your personality(Btw "reasons to variety" is incomprehensible, what does that even mean? The following "But not about you and your personality" also doesn't make sense in this case)
Trust me you do matter
Look, a bird for you that chatters
They would make you flattered
You just made happy marbles scatter (what does this mean?)To the world you are important
Look, those stars twinklingatare constant
Just don't be a dark absorbent
Don't let your happiness ("life be shortened" is better in my opinion) be shortenedDon't let your soul be depressed
thank god you are the one blessed
some do not even get it , when (optional but sounds better) expressed
but they are the ones more oppressed**(WHAT DOES THIS MEAN)**They are the ones seeking for hope
In some situations, they cannot cope
They don't see happiness even with a microscope
Have to climb to the top of a steep slopeBut they do know how to handle the pain
And you must get it inside your brain
Ending it all will owe you no gain
In fact, you'll lose the beauty of the rain(i really don't think someone would give a shit about the rain in such a state)Many of you get your egos hurt
That is suchashame and dirt
How is ending it all going to give you comfort?
"I'm stupid" should be written on your shirtTrust me, it will get better with time
Sit back and taste this juiceof thedrained from lime
You will need some energy to climb
TurnPut those happy memories on rewindYou are blessed, you are alive
C'mon and give me a high five
Put on the seat belt and I'll drive
We need to tell others they need to surviveI always knew in some part(i don't feel like "knew in some part" is correct but it might be)
Something was there in your heart
That wanted you alive from the start
Now, you and happiness can never be apart!I just corrected how what you wrote was written but there are other things i consider to be in poor taste and show ignorance of what depression actually is
Examples
-"Just give a break to you and your anxiety"
-"Don't let your soul be depressed"
-""I'm stupid" should be written on your shirt"And i also don't like "thank god you are the one blessed" but that's for a different reason
I'd like to explain why those statements in my opinion are bad but i don't feel like it right now
P.S. Even after the correction some lines are just incomprehensible so improve what you're doing
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@thestrangest Thank you. I will definitely improve on it :)
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@fearlesswoman you're welcome
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@fearlesswoman it's cute and sing songy. I bet it would sound better in song than just reading it.
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@us-poet true
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@us-poet You're right. I guess apparently I'm more of a songwriter now lol
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What if you are a threat to society?
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@the_weird_kid said in Suicide is not an option:
What if you are threat to society?
a threat*
Idk, stop being such by seeking help?
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@thestrangest good point
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@the_weird_kid I do not believe anyone is a threat to the society unless if one is a criminal or something.
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@fearlesswoman True XD
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@fearlesswoman said in Suicide is not an option:
@the_weird_kid I do not believe anyone is a threat to the society unless if one is a criminal or something.
Maybe you should change it to "you're a benefit to humanity" it sounds better
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@thestrangest What about "You are not a threat to the society" because that one does sound better but they aren't gonna understand what this is about... kinda