Movie Script: Please Read

[Tyler W.]

This is the first part of my movie script. I hope you get to read it, its about 23 pages long. Its not in the format I wanted it but it will do.

Ronin:

Int.
Tamoto’s Living Room
Night
Act One, Scene One

An old man sits next to a fire. He is old in age, approximately 65 years old. He sits in a wooden chair with a black bokuto in his lap.
Old Tamoto
I have aged haven’t I.

A young boy appears. He approximately 16 years old, and bears a childish smile. He wears a blue hakana and bears some resemblance to Old Tamoto.
Young Boy
I am afraid so, my friend.

Old Tamoto shifts his weight in his chair. He stares at the black bokuto, it being in perfect condition.

Old Tamoto
I am become weak despite my training

Young Boy
No, your body has thrived but it’s your mind I worry about

Old Tamoto (chuckles)
Why?

Young Boy
Because you have caged yourself in here for so long, you
Have forgotten how it feel to be out in the wild.

Old Tamoto
I have forgotten most things.

Young Boy
Like Rorentus-o…
Old Tamoto raises his hand

Old Tamoto
Do not remind me

Young Boy
A wise man once said
that a man who wants to
forget is broken inside.

Old Tamoto
I am not broken

Young Boy
See, you have trained
yourself not to show it
when you are suffering.

Old Tamoto stares off into the distance, his eyes fixed on a large wooden cabinet with a lock on it.

Old Tamoto
Goodnight

Old Tamoto starts walking to another room.

Young Boy
Tell me, what has finally
broken you?

Old Tamoto glances back and shakes his head. He opens the door to his room and enters.

Ext.
Foggy Forest
Night
Act One, Scene Two

A younger Tamoto is showed, approximately 2o years old. He is dress in a white cuirass with a black streak running down the left side of the mask. He has sheathed a “gold” katana in a white sheathe. He is leading them through a foggy forest, nicknamed the Akuma no mori, The Forest of The Demons.

Young Tamoto
Arusha, do you
see anything

Arusha is a master archer. In his hands, he holds a metal bow with blades on the ends of the bow. He wears a red cuirass and is about 16 years old.

Arusha
I am not seeing anything.

Musashi
They must be hiding then.

Musashi is the oldest of the group. He doesn’t wear a cuirass but wears a blue robe. In his hands is a bokuto. He is about 45.

Tamoto
Rorentsu~o, go look ahead.

Rorentsu~o is a moderate age samurai. He wears a yellow cuirass and carries a black katana.
Rorentus-o marches ahead with his katana drawn. As he walks, the fog rises.

Musashi
Master, the fog is rising!

Tamoto unsheathes his katana, the rest of the group follows. Out of the fog emerges 20 Akumaa (Demons). They are wearing dark green cuirasses and carrying yellow katanas. They have faces engrave on their masks.

Akumaa Leader
You have trespass onto our land, what do you say in your defense?
Int.
Tamoto’s Bedroom
Day
Act One, Scene Three

Tamoto wakes up from his sleep with a jolt. He is sweaty and bears a worried face. Getting out of bed, he walks to a black closet and opens it up. Inside is the same white cuirass with the black stripe and the “gold” katana. Both have been preserved in good condition.

Old Tamoto (whisper)
Oh, why do you haunt me?

Tamoto grasps the sword in his hands. Instantly he is snapped into a flashback.

Young Tamoto is standing with his allies. They face the Akumaa, the green cuirass samurais.

Tamoto (whisper)
Draw your weapons

The samurai group follows the order. Meanwhile, the Akumaa wait with their weapons drawn.

Akumaa Leader
LOWER YOUR WEAPONS!

Everything moves in slow motion. Tamoto grips his katana tighter. Arusha notches an arrow from his quiver. Musashi twirls his bokuto.
Akumaa Leader
CHARGE!

The Akumaa Leader and his soldiers begin to charge. Arusha fires an arrow and it flies with great force. It goes straight through one of the Akumaa’s armor. Musashi strikes down several Akumaa soldiers while Tamoto slices several Akumaa soldiers with ease.

Tamoto
FIND RORENTSU-O!

Musashi
WHERE’S ARUSHA!

Arusha is shown walking towards the Akumaa Leader with a drawn blue katana. The Akumaa Leader laughs and marchers towards Arusha.

Tamoto
I MUST SAVE HIM!

Tamoto begins slashing furiously. He begins to run towards Arusha but takes several stabs from Akumaa soldiers. Meanwhile, Arusha raises his katana at the Akumaa Leader.

Arusha
I am going to kill you!

Akumaa Leader
YOU ARE NOTHING BUT A CHILD

Arusha
A child of War!

Tamoto releases the katana and it drops to the ground. The katana is engraved with Naitoshadou (Night Shadow). Some whispers could be heard.

Old Tamoto
So many souls are trapped
inside you Naitoshadou. I am sorry
for your buried.

Tamoto picks up the katana and sheathes it. The whispers stop and the room is quiet. He puts it back into the cabinet and closes it. Young Boy walks into the room.

Young Boy
Are you ok Master.

Old Tamoto
I am not sure?

Young Boy
The dreams…

Old Tamoto
Yes, but why?

Young Boy
Why you feel pain?

Old Tamoto sits down and looks at the Young Boy.

Young Boy
It’s a feeling you have not
felt for ages, isn’t it?

Old Tamoto
Yes, but why does it feel so new?

Young Boy
Because you have forgot how to feel.

Old Tamoto looks down. He bears a sad face but soon looks up. Old Tamoto gets up from chair.

Old Tamoto
Come, let’s go drink tea

Young Boy and Old Tamoto leave the room.

Int.
Tamoto’s Living Room
Day
Act One, Scene Four

Old Tamoto pours Young Boy a cup of tea. He sets the cup next to him and sits down.
Old Tamoto
What am I going to do now?

Young Boy
What do you mean?

Old Tamoto
What do I do with my life?

Young Boy
That’s a question I can’t answer

Old Tamoto looks at the wooden cabinet in the corner, his eyes fixed on the lock.

Locksmith
Why do you want such a big lock?

Tamoto
I must keep something locked

Locksmith
What’s so valuable that you need this?

Tamoto
It is none of your concern

Locksmith hammers down on the lock. Tamoto stares as the Locksmith works.

Locksmith
Is it gold?

Tamoto
No, something far more valuable

Locksmith
What can be more valuable than gold?

Tamoto
Life

Old Tamoto drops his tea cup on the floor. The cup shatters to pieces as the Young Boy looks in shock.

Old Tamoto
I am very sorry.

Young Boy
It’s ok master
Young Boy grabs a broom and begins to sweep. As he does, Old Tamoto stands up and looks outsides. The stars light up the dark night.

Old Tamoto
Oh, the things I have seen….

Young Boy
And the things you have yet to discover

Old Tamoto
The night is upon us, let us rest so that we may
awake in the morning early

Old Tamoto waddles to his room

Young Boy
Master….

Old Tamoto glances back.

Young Boy
May your soul find peace?

Old Tamoto (laughing)
There’s no peace for me

Int.
Tamoto’s Bedroom Room
Night
Act One, Scene Five

Tamoto
STOP ARUSHA!

Tamoto white cuirass is stained with blood. He desperately tries to fight off the oncoming attacks of the Akumaa’s but such attempts are feudal.

Akumaa Leader
BOW BEFORE MY GREATNESS

Akumaa Leader swings his katana with great force. Arusha raises his katana but the blade is shattered from Akumaa’s Leader swing. Staring in disbelief, Arusha unsheathes his short sword.

Akumaa Leader
HA, YOU SHALL DIE LIKE YOUR FATHER AND UNCLE!

Akumaa raises his katana towards Tamoto.

Arusha
WE WILL NEVER DIE BECAUSE OUR SOULS ARE STRONG AND OUR BLADES STRONGER

Arusha charges at Akumaa Leader. Akumaa Leader sidesteps and slashes Arusha’s leg. Arusha falls to the ground.

Tamoto
NOOOO!

Tamoto begins racing towards Akumaa Leader.

Akuma Leader
YOU WISH TO DIE AS WELL!!

Tamoto
No, I wish to protect my nephew as though he was my own

Akuma Leader
YOU ARE PATHETIC TAMOTO

The two fight each other. It’s clear that Akuma Leader is fighting better and will win. As a final move, Akuma Leader gets behind Tamoto and slashes Tamoto’s legs, forcing him to kneel.

Akuma Leader
HOLD THIS WEAKLEN BACK

Several Akumaa Soldiers rush to hold Tamoto.

Akuma Leader
BRING ME THE OTHER TWO HUMANS
Musashi, Rorentsu~o and Arusha are dragged by Akuma Soldiers and are place right in front of Akumaa Leader.

Akuma Leader
What do you say now Tamoto, or Naitoshadou?
Tamoto looks up and glares at Akuma Leader.

Tamoto
If you hurt any of them, I will kill you

Akuma Leader
With what, this?

Akuma Leader takes Tamoto’s sword. He twirls it right in front of Tamoto’s face.

Akuma Leader
You do not fear us, do you?

Tamoto
I do not fear anything

Akuma Leader
Very well, Naitoshadou

Akuma turns around quickly and decapitates Musashi.

Tamoto
NOO!

Tamoto quickly punches the Akumaa Soldiers holding him, steals a katana and runs towards Akumaa with the katana raised. Akumaa Leader raises his sword to Arusha’s throat.

Akumaa Leader
I WILL KILL HIM

Arusha
KILL HIM NOW

Arusha nods his head. Tamoto quickly thinks in his mind and glancing at Akuma Leader. Akuma Leader is grinning.

Tamoto
If I surrender, do I have your word you won’t hurt anyone else?

Akumaa Leader
You have my word, Tamoto.

Tamoto drops the katana to the ground. It makes a loud thud that echoes in Tamoto’s head.

Akumaa Leader
Good

Akumaa Leader turns around and stabs Rorentsu~o. He instantly begins to bleed out and falls.

Tamoto
YOU GAVE ME YOUR WORD!

Akumaa Leader laughs and kneels in front of Tamoto. He wipes the sword’s blood onto Tamoto’s cuirass.

Akumaa Leader
You gave me your word that the boy would be killed

Tamoto
He did not deserve to die Tobiko

Akumaa Leader
HE DID, HE WAS THE CHILD OF THE EMPEROR WE WERE FIGHTING!

Tamoto
He did nothing wrong!

Akumaa Leader
That’s the reason you are here brother! Because you couldn’t follow my orders!

Tamoto
YOUR ORDERS WERE WRONG!

Akumaa Leader
Fine Tamoto. You shall share the same fate as him!

Akumaa Leader turns around and stabs Arusha. Arusha falls to the ground, clutching his stomach. Tamoto begins to cry.

Akumaa Leader
I have finally broken you Tamoto.

Tamoto angrily stares back at Akumaa Leader
Akumaa Leader
You are now Ronin Tamoto

Tamoto
I WILL KILL YOU!

Akumaa Leader drops the katana onto the floor.

Akumaa Leader
Go ahead, kill me brother.

Tamoto grabs the katana from the ground. Several Akumaa Soldiers rushed towards Tamoto but each one is met with a swift slash. This continues for hours until there are no more Akumaa Soldiers.

Akumaa Leader
Are you going to kill me now?

Tamoto
Before I do, what are your last words.

Akumaa Leader
You are still weaker than me

Tamoto nods his head and charges towards Akumaa Leader The fog thickens and Tamoto slashing through the air but no blood is drawn. Akumaa Leader has disappeared.

Tamoto
I SHALL HAVE MY REVENGE

Tamoto hurries to Arusha but he is long dead. He picks up his body and begins to march away. He continues for days, marching through snow, rain, and hot weather. He finally comes to his house, finally resting the body of Arusha on the ground. Tamoto begins to cry.

Tamoto
I am sorry Arusha, I could not save you….

Tamoto is showed burying Arusha’s body under a Cherry Blossom Tree. He rests Arusha’s bow onto the grave

Tamoto
So, young….

Int.
Tamoto’s Living Room
Night
Act One, Scene Six

Old Tamoto looks at the lock on the closet. He sighs and takes a key he was wearing on a necklace. Quietly creeping towards the cabinet, Old Tamoto unlocks the door. It makes a soft creak and as the door swings open, the young boy appears.

Young Boy
What are you doing Master?

Old Tamoto pulls out a pieced together katana. It’s clear that Old Tamoto attempted to try to fuse it back together but had not luck. He looks at a shiny arrow he made for Arusha that was meant to avenge his father’s death but he never got to use it. He sees a polished and refined red cuirass that Tamoto did after his death. The last item Old Tamoto sees is the blue kendo of Arusha, master archer and Tamoto’s nephew. Old Tamoto begins to cry.

Old Tamoto
I miss you so much Arusha…

Young Boy
I know Uncle, and some day we may meet again….

Old Tamoto
Not until I fulfill my promise to you

Young Boy
What is it?

Old Tamoto
To find and kill my brother. To avenge your father’s and your death.
Young Boy
You don’t need to do that….

Old Tamoto
Yes, I do, because a soul cannot rest in peace if the soul is tormented….
Young Boy
…by the memories, a man tries to erase from his mind.
End Act One

[A Former User]

I'm going to list the errors i see in the story

[A Former User]

This post is deleted!

[A Former User]

@how-to-make-a Line 23-25 : feels*

[A Former User]

@how-to-make-a that "a wise man once said..." thing at the beginning doesn't make sense

[A Former User]

Scene 2 :

showen*

[A Former User]

Dressed*

[Jennifer.T]

Really good job

[A Former User]

Fuck this shit, only half a page in and I've found 6 mistakes and it's super hard to read. Refine the writing and then repost it and I'll read it for ya.