@chandru First, ewww. What the hell is the matter with you?! Second, your grammar is messed up, much like you are.

My girlfriend's birthday is in a few days and I wrote her a poem. (I have no idea why) Although I probably won't give it to her, I would like to know if it's any good in case I actually go through with it, so I'm putting it here to get some opinions on it.

Many can say,
in several ways,
that you have changed my life for the better.
However,
rather than telling you
what you already know
how about I show
our time up till now.

The first time we met,
I almost thought it couldn't be,
and that my eyes were deceiving me.
though I may have only been there
because I lost a bet,
I won a reward much greater,
than what I could have ever imagined,

Then, after the first time we kissed,
your lips were all I thought about,
the ones I can't live without.
And as I fell for all to see,
head over heals,
for all that I feel,
you're always there laughing with me.

Even through the rain
as we play our little game.
I feel more love for you everyday.

@willoww Why wouldn't anyone comment?

@bgirl101105 Then, go somewhere where they do care. You can be with family, friends... or a therapist. Whatever suits you're needs rather than being with a bunch of strangers.

I think my mom is trying to embarrass me to death. Since she heard that I actually wrote poetry without being asked, she has signed me up for this local poetry club, which requires us to submit at least three poems a week! (And the “teacher” encourages us to write 5 or more) So, I’ll be testing my poems here before I submit them to my club.

This might be embarrassing, for me at least, but since I don't really know anyone here I thought that I could make my debut (as a poet of all things) here. And this is one of my first poems ever so please don't rush to judge.

Introduction

Though there’s not much to tell,
I’ll still give it a spell,
and try my best not to bore.
But, where to begin,
with so much in store,
I don’t know if I can show discipline.
Yet, I will resist letting out too much,
until I can see,
if there are any like me,
those who have been through trauma,
though not much drama,
and have had their life torn apart,
before it could really start.
And no, I don’t mean the miserable sights,
who “think” that they can no longer feel delight.
I only wish to know,
those kind and gentle souls,
who, even now,
can call themselves happy.

And now I think that I have gone off track again,
So adieu until whenever.

@girlwhois16 Thanks for saying that. I'm glad that someone likes it.

@ragnar Thank you. My first attempt at poetry is going better than I anticipated.

@sup She looks somewhat like the last drawing, but not the others.

@sup Well, you said she looks exactly like the girl in the last drawing, but there are clear differences in the forehead, lips, and cheeks, so only the nose and eyes look similar between those girls.

@thestrangest ok, bye.

@thestrangest Umm... Did you just call me a guy?

@thestrangest By the way, do you have any personal experience with suicide? (have you ever tried killing yourself?)

@thestrangest It would have been better than the typical "don't do it".

@thestrangest I definitely think that I was a coward at the time.

@thestrangest I do have experience with suicide. I tried to kill myself when I was 10. And I would have succeeded if it hadn't been for my older brother.

@boots22 I guess I did it wrong when I tried it.

@boots22 But, it's not as easy.

@thegoddess I'm pro gun and anti bullet. The only way guns can kill (other than being bludgeons of course) is by firing bullets. So, I say that there needs to be more regulations on who can buy bullets.

@thestrangest You obviously didn't understand what I was trying to say. And what I mean to say is that suicide is the cowardly way out, because even if it takes guts to kill yourself, it takes more courage not to and face life instead of running away from your problems.

As for religion, you said that if you kill yourself you go to heaven, so I simply corrected that. And when I said that I wouldn't be alive today without my religion, I literally meant that I wouldn't be alive, not that I found some reason to live. I was nearly beaten to death on my way home from school. And I just made it to that parking lot before I collapsed. I thank God every day for my survival.