I think your choice in wording and delivery help very much in portraying the emotions you aimed for. Being a kid of divorced fathers at a similar age I can completly understand those emotions. Altho I find the "was it me?" question a little played out, it does not hurt the presentation of the character and it is a valid question to ask when in that situation. Overall I quite enjoyed the text, very good delivery and amazing vocabulary. You had a few spelling mistakes, but they where so few it didn't hurt the flow of reading. Congratulations, I hope you post more stories in the future, I would love to read them aswell.
Posts made by LautaroMl
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RE: My story that I've been working on for some time.
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RE: Looking for M 36 James
I might not be your midnight prince, but if you ever feel like you wanna chat with me you can add me :)