Controversial posts made by Charles McPicle

What is the solution to ending the Palestin-Israeli conflict and bringing peace to the middle East ?

This lacks proper structure and a form to be considered a poem. In fact it resembles a text of a rap song. Perhaps you should think of making lines between every verse, and not writing it as a one long sentence. I am not trying to be an asshole, but constructive criticism is the key to mastering any skill.