@Niyaa hii Niyaa...
Can we talk.. I think it will be a great experience with you 🥰
Chapter I need you to rate.
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Thank you, Ragnar! :)
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@anonymousangel said in Chapter I need you to rate.:
@alwaysstranger No, not really.
It is. Only if you take it the right way. I agree with @AlwaysStranger about the title. It sounds very much like an amateur terrible internet preteen story title.
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You never know, maybe those are some of the readers.
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@anonymousangel I really wouldn't want to appeal to that cancerous stereotypical agegroup. It's just immature little kiddies who think they're good at things already, and are full of themselves.
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@veitak You think I'm full of myself?
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@anonymousangel Also, I'm not good at writing, I just do it cuz it's fun.
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@anonymousangel Did I say you? I said you shouldn't want to appeal to that idiotic age group. You say you don't think like a 12 year old, now you get to prove it.
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@veitak Kk, thank you for your opinion and I will change it on the next one I post tomorrow.
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@anonymousangel thank you
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its not that long however it did feel longer than it actually was. didnt really like how the characters were introduced. instead of her telling us who and how they are, show it? not now, maybe in the later chapters? instead of also using numbers to tell how tall or light or different she is, use more words and again show us. understand what the flashback is for but i also didnt like how the transition from present to past was.. didnt really work for me. its lacking the fire which first chapters or prologues need to engage its readers. id say start from the flashback and remove the first part.
these arejust suggestions. youre still 12 and youve made this years ago! good for you 🙌 go read more books write read write.
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@khai Thank you so much for your ideas, I will definitely work on that. Thank you again. :)