Hi all
I am having bad today. I received abusing messages from my landlord. He is alcoholic and smoking cannabis. i am clean person and I am trying to be nice to him. I am cleaning my room weekly I am cleaning bathroom (only I), I am cleaning floor in hole house. He never sees all these staff just complaining if I do something wrong.
I also had supervision with my team leader yesterday. She told me that some my patient complained about me. I have breached confidentiality. It was verbal message to patient mobile phone. I cannot prove otherwise. This is my contract job and expire in September. i am looking for new job. i had some very good job interviews. However, my Team leader is my referee.
Chapter I need you to rate.
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@Ragnar-Lothbrok
Summary:In which two Criminals are on the run from their past mistakes and past loves, how they will cope with newfound secrets, until they can find home once again?
AARRGGHH, it sounds so cheesy!
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@zoobie said in Chapter I need you to rate.:
@alwaysstranger this is not a better way to improve someone
It is
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@alwaysstranger No, not really.
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@anonymousangel sounds cool tho, u good at this angel, keep it up
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Thank you, Ragnar! :)
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@anonymousangel said in Chapter I need you to rate.:
@alwaysstranger No, not really.
It is. Only if you take it the right way. I agree with @AlwaysStranger about the title. It sounds very much like an amateur terrible internet preteen story title.
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You never know, maybe those are some of the readers.
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@anonymousangel I really wouldn't want to appeal to that cancerous stereotypical agegroup. It's just immature little kiddies who think they're good at things already, and are full of themselves.
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@veitak You think I'm full of myself?
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@anonymousangel Also, I'm not good at writing, I just do it cuz it's fun.
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@anonymousangel Did I say you? I said you shouldn't want to appeal to that idiotic age group. You say you don't think like a 12 year old, now you get to prove it.
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@veitak Kk, thank you for your opinion and I will change it on the next one I post tomorrow.
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@anonymousangel thank you
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its not that long however it did feel longer than it actually was. didnt really like how the characters were introduced. instead of her telling us who and how they are, show it? not now, maybe in the later chapters? instead of also using numbers to tell how tall or light or different she is, use more words and again show us. understand what the flashback is for but i also didnt like how the transition from present to past was.. didnt really work for me. its lacking the fire which first chapters or prologues need to engage its readers. id say start from the flashback and remove the first part.
these arejust suggestions. youre still 12 and youve made this years ago! good for you 🙌 go read more books write read write.
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@khai Thank you so much for your ideas, I will definitely work on that. Thank you again. :)