Hey! Male 36hear
Chapter I need you to rate.
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@veitak Kk, thank you for your opinion and I will change it on the next one I post tomorrow.
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@anonymousangel thank you
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its not that long however it did feel longer than it actually was. didnt really like how the characters were introduced. instead of her telling us who and how they are, show it? not now, maybe in the later chapters? instead of also using numbers to tell how tall or light or different she is, use more words and again show us. understand what the flashback is for but i also didnt like how the transition from present to past was.. didnt really work for me. its lacking the fire which first chapters or prologues need to engage its readers. id say start from the flashback and remove the first part.
these arejust suggestions. youre still 12 and youve made this years ago! good for you 🙌 go read more books write read write.
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@khai Thank you so much for your ideas, I will definitely work on that. Thank you again. :)