im bored
Another poem!!!! I dunno I'm bored :P
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This lacks proper structure and a form to be considered a poem. In fact it resembles a text of a rap song. Perhaps you should think of making lines between every verse, and not writing it as a one long sentence. I am not trying to be an asshole, but constructive criticism is the key to mastering any skill.
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@XxJadyBabyxX noice
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@XxJadyBabyxX Good One...😀
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@Charles-McPicle due u r mean
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@Charles-McPicle i hope u r happy now dude, u ruined my day 😭
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@Charles-McPicle oof dude
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@Charles-McPicle Hhaha that's what i was thinking 😂
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@XxJadyBabyxX I like it. You write what makes you feel better. If it helps you get things sorted then this has done its job. Doesn’t matter that it lacks this or that. Now if you want to work on structure and all dm me my lil bit. I’ll give you all the knowledge I have and guide you to the best of my abilities even though I myself am still a novice and am learning my craft.
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Good job.
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I support you.